Essay Comment

Hello Sir,

I hope my essay is a little bit more enjoyabel to read then the first take you got today, but it wasn't done yet i just wnated comments on it so I reworked it a bit well ALOT. So hopes its better then a 1+.
My essay when i copied it over i didn't format properly but I'll hand a hard copy in on Monday and as well I am nto sure how to put a tittle page one my blog so that will be included with my hard copy along with the bibliography. Thanks.

-Adam